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:iconthewrittenrevolution: I found your style of writing endearing, as it is somewhat similar to my own. In this critique, I would like to highlight a few things I liked about your poem and also offer a few tips that may help you with future pieces (hopefully). On the theme, it took me a little delving to get into it proper...


:iconthewrittenrevolution: I found the images in this poem, though simple and possibly even commonplace, intense and refreshing. This is not a bad thing; in fact, it's even cooler that you were able to use ordinary images in an interesting way. You used a single color, gray, which my imagination responded to with a grayscal...

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Computer Engineering, Poetry, Music, Love, Life.
コンピュータ工学,詩、音楽、愛、命。
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it's been a slow year thusfar, for poetry and i;
there hasn't been much need to write.
neither inspiration nor revelation have set foot on my doorstep.

however, i am pleased to reveal that i have written not just one, but a pair of works tonight; which are meant to compliment each other.
i'll be sprucing them up and most likely releasing them to the public some time soon.

i can only hope that after the adjustments are made, the works will shine in a presentable manner.

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:iconohineedtea:
Thanks for the fav :D
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Thank you so much, honey. :heart:
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:iconrepublic2033:
thanks for faving :happybounce: I really appreciate it !
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Akai-karasu Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm pretty late, but still: thanks for collecting 'values! :)
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drifter-dallyings Dec 29, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for the :+fav:, and the incredibly helpful critique. :iconarmstrongtighthugplz:
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Vainamoinenian Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your webcam is Mesmerizing! I totally loved it! :D Is there a continuation? Or a place where I can read all their dialogues? 
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Vainamoinenian Aug 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the fave! :)
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SeaPlume Jul 3, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks for the :+fav: on my poems!
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