Hi there! This is a critique on the behalf of #PoeticalCondition.

Starting from an inconceivably large perspective and working your way down to daily routines was an interesting way to spin this idea. I would've liked to have seen that tied in a bit more, though.

Ending with "we lie in the grass and gaze at the stars" was wonderful a wonderful start, but I feel like the line connecting them was very tenuous. As much as I loath to say so about a poem, it needs more explaining to make that bit relevant. Why does the planet's slow, ancient three-step waltz matter when I have an appointment to keep? Because my entire lifetime is but the shadow of a grain of sand on the shores of those stones' eternity.

Overall, your word choice was excellent, but there were a few places where it needed a bit of work I felt.

"We get so caught up." There's a better way to say that. You don't see the word "get" in a lot of poetry for a good reason; it's really an unflattering word. Something an angry old man screams at a stray dog, not something a poet uses to describe moments of treasured experience.

'We're so caught up' or 'We are so often swept away,' since the next line is about the rising and falling tide.
You use "oh-so" twice in the span of a few lines, some of which are one-worders; twice isn't enough to establish repetition, and it sounds a little like grasping for a better descriptor.

Other than those two, which I felt really needed addressing, some of your other words could use some attention. Otherwise, they risk sounding cliched and overused. 'Rising,' 'falling,' 'slow.' There are better words to describe what you're looking for - stronger words.

If this were a novel, I'd tell you to stick with short and simple in most cases, but here, in a poem, you're waging a literary war on someone else's perceptions: to quote a character from Inception, "You mustn't be afraid to dream a little bigger, darling."

As for linebreaks and formatting, I feel they were done very well. They don't detract from the poem at all, in my opinion, and toward the end, the one-liners really add to the feeling of being infinitely small.

Excellent work over all. Thank you for submitting this. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>